Saturday, 24 May 2014

Eternally Bright..

The rain poured down in torrents as she sat on the roadside, meager torn rags hardly enough to shield her shivering bare body against the assault of the heavens. Her lips and nails had turned blue with the cold while her teeth chattered as she withdrew deeper into the chasms of death, begging the Gods above as she had all her life for a morsel of pity. Hope that had kept her anchored to this world now abandoned her as despair, pain and the deadly chill enclosed her in its suffocating tendrils, patiently robbing her of breath as it became more strenuous and uneven.

 As her soul slipped away unacknowledged beneath the open heavens, it rose above the drenched city like a speck of light burning bright and free. And then it swelled into a luminous ball of unshackled flames and shot through the skies to the cosmos above to join the ever eternal stars in blissful salvation.

Written as part of the Five Sentence Fiction prompt.
Word Prompt: Anchor



25 comments:

  1. What a heartbreaking, pitiful existence. Fabulous imagery and emotion throughout. x

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  2. Dark! Really dark! Nicely written nonetheless. Still dark! I remember I had a dark one in the blog, but it was kind of spooky I guess :)

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    1. Thanks Samik.. Though spooky? I didn't mean for it to be spooky but guess it turned out to be one. :P

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    2. Its not the classic horror film spooky that I refer to. Its the shiver I get at the thought of anyone possibly going through this. So, in that way, I guess its a little spooky. But great writing Miss Proficient Writer! :) ...

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    3. Thanks Samik yet again.. Definitely got the 'spooky' you meant!! :P

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  3. Amazing imagination and beautiful narration....really liked it ...particularly the ending :)

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  4. This is a dark, very moving piece. Well written and deeply felt.
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    1. Thank you so much for the kind words!! :D

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  6. Aah brilliant and haunting. What an existence to have!

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    1. Thanks Sabeeha!! Glad you liked the post. :)

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  7. The was clever writing, so descriptive. You've a great imagination :)

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  8. Great description & imagery. It's such a mystery & no one really knows what happens after death...Bright light in cosmos.

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    1. Thanks Anita.. Yeah death beyond life is such a mystery..:)

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  9. Ah! The plight!

    A well worded post.

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  10. It ached and then came peace. This one was beautifully crafted!!!

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  11. It gives me great pleasure to let you know you are nominated for the Liebster award, do visit http://sahitibloggin.blogspot.com/2014/06/the-leibster-award.html, cheers!

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    1. OMG!! Thank you so much Sahiti!! M honored!! :*

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  12. I am glad that i nominated you for the Leibster award, do visit my blog..

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