The rain poured down
in torrents as she sat on the roadside, meager torn rags hardly enough to
shield her shivering bare body against the assault of the heavens. Her lips and
nails had turned blue with the cold while her teeth chattered as she withdrew deeper
into the chasms of death, begging the Gods above as she had all her life for a
morsel of pity. Hope that had kept her anchored to this world now abandoned her
as despair, pain and the deadly chill enclosed her in its suffocating tendrils,
patiently robbing her of breath as it became more strenuous and uneven.
As her soul slipped away unacknowledged
beneath the open heavens, it rose above the drenched city like a speck of light
burning bright and free. And then it swelled into a luminous ball of unshackled
flames and shot through the skies to the cosmos above to join the ever eternal
stars in blissful salvation.
Written as part of the Five Sentence Fiction prompt.
Word Prompt: Anchor
What a heartbreaking, pitiful existence. Fabulous imagery and emotion throughout. x
ReplyDeleteThanks Lizzie.. :)
DeleteDark! Really dark! Nicely written nonetheless. Still dark! I remember I had a dark one in the blog, but it was kind of spooky I guess :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Samik.. Though spooky? I didn't mean for it to be spooky but guess it turned out to be one. :P
DeleteIts not the classic horror film spooky that I refer to. Its the shiver I get at the thought of anyone possibly going through this. So, in that way, I guess its a little spooky. But great writing Miss Proficient Writer! :) ...
DeleteThanks Samik yet again.. Definitely got the 'spooky' you meant!! :P
DeleteAmazing imagination and beautiful narration....really liked it ...particularly the ending :)
ReplyDeleteThis is a dark, very moving piece. Well written and deeply felt.
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ReplyDeleteBeautifully woven thot! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for the kind words!! :D
DeleteAah brilliant and haunting. What an existence to have!
ReplyDeleteThanks Sabeeha!! Glad you liked the post. :)
DeleteThe was clever writing, so descriptive. You've a great imagination :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Laura.. :)
DeleteGreat description & imagery. It's such a mystery & no one really knows what happens after death...Bright light in cosmos.
ReplyDeleteThanks Anita.. Yeah death beyond life is such a mystery..:)
DeleteAh! The plight!
ReplyDeleteA well worded post.
Thanks Saru.. :)
DeleteIt ached and then came peace. This one was beautifully crafted!!!
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ReplyDeleteOMG!! Thank you so much Sahiti!! M honored!! :*
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