Sunday, 13 July 2014

Vengeance..

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The lightning streaked through the clouds like a fiery bolt and illuminated her face. Her very sight took my breath away; her skin so pale and delicate like the petals of an innocent flower that had bloomed in a storm. But she was no innocent and his arms wrapped around her beautiful body filled me with a rage so uncontrollable and destructive that I plunged the knife into his heart.


Blood gushed through the open wound and stained her pale body red. I smiled to myself knowing the pages had finally turned and now she will be forever mine.

Written as part of the Five Sentence Fiction prompt.
Word Prompt: Pages
This 100 word fiction is also written for Friday Fictioneers.
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37 comments:

  1. Tomichan Matheikal13 July 2014 at 12:46

    OMG! Scary.

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  2. Anonymous13 July 2014 at 16:55

    Wow. Chilling...good one.

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  3. Soumyaa Verma13 July 2014 at 17:14

    A nice conjuncture of the prompts!
    -Soumyaa

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  4. kalpana solsi13 July 2014 at 17:40

    A tale of violent love and possessiveness.

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    1. Donna Burman13 July 2014 at 20:05

      Love can indeed be unpredictable and violent at times... Welcome to my blog Kalpana... :)

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  5. Unknown13 July 2014 at 18:22

    Wonderfully written. This was an awesome way to present the topic. :)

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    1. Donna Burman13 July 2014 at 20:08

      Really?? So happy you liked it Namrata... Thanks for the kind words so much... :*

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  6. Anita Sabat13 July 2014 at 19:40

    Will the murder really make her love him?
    Nicely expressed :)

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    1. Donna Burman13 July 2014 at 20:10

      A deluded and deranged mind is hardly ever capable of rational thought right?? Thanks Anita... :)

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  7. Alicia13 July 2014 at 21:23

    YIKES!!!!!

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  8. Shilpa Gupte13 July 2014 at 21:53

    That was a nice one, Anusree! Possessiveness does bring out the devil in man!

    I have nominated you for the Quintet of Radiance Award, Anusree! Congrats! Read all about it at the link given below....

    http://shilpaview-ideas2.blogspot.in/2014/07/my-second-blogging-awardthe-quintet-of.html

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    1. Donna Burman14 July 2014 at 22:30

      OMG!!! Thanks so much Shilpa!! Already on cloud 9... Dancing!!! Thanks again dear... So much!! :*

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  9. Anonymous14 July 2014 at 01:25

    That was a creepy ending! The scary part is this really happens.

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  10. Anonymous14 July 2014 at 04:06

    Wow...chilling and intense.

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  11. Anonymous14 July 2014 at 08:53

    Dear Aunusree, Excellent story - so true to life and I could see it playing out in my mind. You are really good! Nan :)

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    1. Donna Burman15 July 2014 at 21:45

      Hey Nan! Welcome to my blog.. And thanks for appreciating my work. I'm so glad you liked it! :)

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  12. Beloo Mehra14 July 2014 at 10:08

    Scary stuff!

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  13. Veena14 July 2014 at 11:11

    Excellent writing !!!

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  14. Anonymous14 July 2014 at 11:31

    Horror genre...expressed spookily

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  15. Soumya14 July 2014 at 18:53

    He killed him in front of her and expects her to love him back? If she was not innocent, he should have killed her instead.

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    1. Donna Burman15 July 2014 at 21:53

      A deranged mind is hardly capable of rational thought right? And love can be crooked at times! ;)

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  16. Ankur Anand14 July 2014 at 23:26

    an unusual kind of obsession and killing i must say !
    .. nicely expressed ! :)

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    1. Donna Burman15 July 2014 at 21:55

      Welcome to my blog Ankur!! And thanks for appreciating my work!! It feels so good to see people like my work!! Thanks!! :)

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  17. Anmol Rawat15 July 2014 at 01:35

    That was a dark and chilling take on the prompt. It reeks of an irrational or a psycho mind of the killer right? Or is it something else?
    Good and unique attempt.

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    1. Donna Burman15 July 2014 at 21:57

      Hey Anmol!! Yeah portraying a psycho killer obsessed with the love of his life was my intention! And thanks!! :)

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  18. P.S. Joshi15 July 2014 at 17:09

    Anusree, Good story. He's indeed deranged. He's likely to be put away in an instituion or prison until he's very old. He doesn't stand much of a chance with her or anyone else. That's if he doesn't get a death sentence. Terrible that this really happens. Well written. : ) ---Susan

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    1. Donna Burman15 July 2014 at 22:00

      Haha!! Thanks for completing my story!! Probably going to jail I guess. She definitely had a reason for leaving him. ;) Thanks!! And welcome to my blog!

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  19. P.S. Joshi15 July 2014 at 18:12

    Anusree, He killed the man right in front of her so I don't think she'll want anything to do with him now. If he doesn't get the death penalty, he's probably going to jail for a long, long time. Well written. : ) ---Susan

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