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I looked at his body,
so silent in death while my cries echoed round my heart. The pain, the
humiliation, the fear all came back in a rush; the torment he had subjected me
to night after night in the shabby attic while his wife lay asleep, blissfully
unaware as my tattered body screamed silently in agony. In the mornings I would go through the house
like a ghost, his cold eyes following my frail body as I worked quietly in the
kitchens, a maid by day and a whore by night.
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But I have had
enough; I looked at the fresh blood staining my hands and slipped out quietly
into the night. And as the rain washed away the blood and the pain, I disappeared
into the dark, knowing his cold eyes would follow me no more.
Written as part of the Five Sentence Fiction prompt.
Word Prompt: Rain
Though I wouldn't question the right of an individual to say "enough", I would rather the individual raised her fist up and said, "Enough, I'm ready to take on you!" The story conveys its message effectively, however.
ReplyDeleteRightly said.. But sometimes fear can hamper ones need for justice.. :) Thanks for stopping by.. :)
DeleteBrilliant take!
ReplyDeleteSo many women actually go through this pain.
Thanks a ton Soumya! :D
DeleteThe last line is really nice Anushree, it conveys the message in a very powerful way. Way to stand up to the oppression :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Vinay so much... Its high time women stood up to oppression... :)
DeleteSuch a powerful take on the prompt, Anusree. Not many would choose her path.
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it Aathira! :)
DeleteInstead of enough why tolerate it at all from beginning just saying .. !
ReplyDeleteeffective conveyed message !
Its ok... To each their own right? And am glad you voiced your opinion. Thanks for stopping by!! :)
DeletePowerful!
ReplyDeleteNice message conveyed in few words!
Welcome to my blog Aayesha.. And thanks for the warm words... :)
DeleteWell done Anusree.
ReplyDeleteTrue story of so many women! Nicely expressed in just five sentences.
Thank you so much Anmol.. :)
DeleteSuperb! I think, many of the women do have to face this in our wretched society. All of them cannot take such a strong step. You explained the agony and that ultimate sigh of freedom from the torment so well. And the girl walking away into the dark suggest to me that who cares about happens next when I have slaughtered the beast feasting upon my soul!!!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for taking the time to leave behind such a heart warming response Namrata! :)
DeleteWell, this is more of a review, rather than what I want published in your blog as a comment. You do realize that at this point, you are writing the same thing over and over again? You can do way better.
ReplyDeleteI shall definitely try my hands at writing something different. Thanks for stopping by.. :)
DeleteTrue for many. Heartwrenching, Anusree.
ReplyDeleteToo bad that often fiction mirrors truth...even when it is ugly truth.
ReplyDeleteI agree Patricia.. :)
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